Kuchh maza nahin aaya. Jab chhoti nazm likhani ho to punch bada chahiye (triveni jaisa). Woh missing hai yahan. Lagta hai ki jaldi se likh diya hai aur revisit nahin kiya.
maza aya bahut maza aaya teesre bandh ko chhod kar..bhaav uske bhi achhe hain magar lay gadbad hai... pahli do panktiyaan- ek pal ki talash mein hazaron pal kho rahe hain
bahut hi achha aur phir doosri panktiyaan zindagi se thak kar kyun sapne bhi ro rahe hain
very touchy bas apni hi baat lagti hai... jaadu hai jaadu
Believe me I don't have words to express. beautiful! shayad shabdon ki hi kami hai jo khud kuch nahi likh pati but this is more tahn just being beautiful. aaj itne dino baad aapka blog khola... kash pehle dekha hota!
Kuchh maza nahin aaya. Jab chhoti nazm likhani ho to punch bada chahiye (triveni jaisa). Woh missing hai yahan. Lagta hai ki jaldi se likh diya hai aur revisit nahin kiya.
ReplyDeletemaza aya bahut maza aaya
ReplyDeleteteesre bandh ko chhod kar..bhaav uske bhi achhe hain magar lay gadbad hai...
pahli do panktiyaan-
ek pal ki talash mein
hazaron pal kho rahe hain
bahut hi achha
aur phir doosri panktiyaan
zindagi se thak kar kyun
sapne bhi ro rahe hain
very touchy
bas apni hi baat lagti hai...
jaadu hai jaadu
Believe me I don't have words to express. beautiful! shayad shabdon ki hi kami hai jo khud kuch nahi likh pati but this is more tahn just being beautiful. aaj itne dino baad aapka blog khola... kash pehle dekha hota!
ReplyDeleteAwesome, these are the only words.
ReplyDeleteEk pal ki talash mein
Hazaron pal kho rahe hain
wah
Jeete raho
abhijeet
3rd stanza change kiya itne saalon baad... ab shayad it sounds better.
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